This will be my last explanation post, as I've run out of editing posts to explain. You can find this last part here.
The first paragraph of this part is a giant tell, same as usual. I did my best to show the details through a more intimate, tighter, more visible viewpoint. The story was meant to be light-hearted, so I tried to make it innocent and serene. I think I did pretty well.
I chose to change the ending of this story, as the original felt very abrupt and cheesy. The themes (don't think too much of it, I'm not much of a "theme" kind of guy) of forgiveness and friendship was too perfect to pass up on. My last bit is still a little cheesy, but in a sweeter, less slap-stick way, in my opinion.
What d'ya think?
Love the happily ever after that was given, haha. Cheesy, yes, but what's life without a bit of cheese? Nice work. :)ReplyDelete