"Those Little Slices of Death" is an intriguing title for a flash fiction piece. It left me with high expectations. The story ended up disappointing me.
There are three "main" characters in this story. Only two of the three are given much consideration. While the characters' quality is somewhat redeemed at the end, they really weren't well done. The protagonist is dull, annoying, and wishy-washy. One character does nothing at all. The third character is just plain strange. That's three strikes from three pitches.
Recounting past events isn't much of a plot. It could've been done exceptionally, I suppose, but it wasn't. Because the character motivation made little sense, so did the plot. There seemed to be an attempt at a theme, which was a nice sentiment; however, it was poorly executed.
The setting was probably the coolest element of this story: near-future with drastically different society, having just enough familiar to balance out the strange. Was it realistic? Borderline, although it was never clearly stated that the setting is Earth, so a lot can be forgiven.
This story is dystopian sci-fi at its rockiest. I recommend that you read it only to comprehend the writer's mistakes.