tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1918357506534714894.post2144049651197253915..comments2024-03-28T05:25:17.791-04:00Comments on Into The Ravenous Maw: Creationist CommandoPatrick Stahlhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09690555802232025818noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1918357506534714894.post-55709867210826378472012-12-30T21:53:40.628-05:002012-12-30T21:53:40.628-05:00Wow, fast comment!
Thanks, sir. I decided to go ...Wow, fast comment!<br /><br />Thanks, sir. I decided to go with a competent fighter over an everyman to get readers rooting for and admiring the protagonist from the beginning, since it's such a short piece. If it were more horrific I definitely would have used an everyman.Patrick Stahlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09690555802232025818noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1918357506534714894.post-56244106504765096942012-12-30T21:40:51.303-05:002012-12-30T21:40:51.303-05:00Interesting turn at the end. Thriller writing is ...Interesting turn at the end. Thriller writing is difficult and I applaud your effort. (I've yet to try true thriller. And I'm not well versed in the genre either.) You've got the short sentences and nice paragraph lengths making for good tension. I wonder if the protagonist's self-confidence and apparent ease detracts from the fear factor? I don't think it affects the adrenaline level though. Nice job!Jeff Hargetthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14198367021884647821noreply@blogger.com